Tum saath the mere
Chup si baarish;
Maano khaamoshi ko todna gunaah ho!
Kashish, qurbat, chubhan, raahat
Khaamoshi ki sharaarat ko
Jyon ishq ki bhi panaah ho!
Gum se lamhon se bani shaam
Chup se khwaabon se saji shaam
Woh shaam hazaaron boondo ki
Ajeeb sapna tha!
Agli subah dekha - na jaane kaise
Baarish ki boondein takiye par thiin
Aankhon se chhalak gayin hon jaise
Bheega, nanha woh sapna -
Uneendi palkon se roka nahin gaya
(Kashish: Attraction; Qurbat: Closeness; Jyon: as if; Uneendi: Sleepy)
18 comments:
beautiful!
arre yaar change kyun kar diya!!pichla version awesome tha sahi mein! aankhon ko meri khwab sambhalna nahi aaya ...
:-o
Must be among the most beautiful ones I've read!
@Gary
thank u
@Anonymous
pata nahin... baat nahin ban rahi thi kuchh!
@Raja
thank u :-)
tum kuchh zyada hi taareef kar dete ho kabhie-kabhie :-p
Wowww!! :)
@MagnaMater
thanks :-)
arre ban rahi thi na!! khwab ke do meanings ban rahe the na.....ek jo aankhon ne raat ko dekha aur ek jo khubsurat wakt us shakhs ke saath bitaya!! jis tarah aankhon se wo khwab nahi sambhla... ussi tarah khwab dekhne wale se relationship nahi sambhal paayi! I dunno but the expression aankhon ko meri khwaab sambhalna nahi aaya was poignant..left me with a sigh..too gud really! But then ur call totally :) ....aapka likha hua hai to aapki marzi!
and on a totally unrelated note...I wonder why my comment came up as anon. last time....as far as I remember I did sign in!
@jj
oh! so it's u.
anyway, thanks again, now that I know u.
yeah I feel that was a better way to end it. but as a whole, I feel this one is better.
and now I guess it was u in the shoutbox as well. is that u?
yup!! u write gud stuff...keep it up!
@jj
thanks yet again! :D
I'll try to. :-)
btw, I liked ur little stories too. especially the (err, rather morbid) twist towards the end. somewhat like Forsyth.
sapne toot jate hain
is bar dil bhi toota, par roya na gaya
@phoenix
:-)
dilon ka kya, dil to tooTte hi rahte hain
sapno ko tooTne na dena
suna hai sapno mein farishte rahte hain
;-)
really beautiful....shveta
thanks Shveta :D
mujhe comment waale lines pasand aayi..
sapno ko Tootane matt dena...
tumne leekhi?? [:O]
on d fly?
@Sam
yup :D :D
thanks :)
ajeeb sapna tha
mujhe bhi comments wali line pasand ayee
"sapno ko tutne mat dena.. sapno me fariste rehta hai"
@Bhav
thanks! :)
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