good start...will love to add something to it, but for the time being I think this sounds better:Chalte rahe hum roshni ka thaam ke dhaagaChaadar andhera har taraf badhta raha
@Shantanumujhe lagta hai ki ismein 1-2 maatra miss ho rahi hain!
hmmmm on second thoughts yes..... but considering the fact that it still has to be completed...
:D sorry cudnt come up with nething better in 5 mins. Here are some ideas though not framed in the best possible manner! Would have given this a better try but I am damn sleepy abhi :)Chalte rahe hum roshni ka thaam ke dhaagaChaadar andhera har taraf bunta chala gayaNikle the to sang apne bhi tha kafilaEk ek kar sabko koi chunta chala gayaDil mein to thi ummeed ki paayenge manzil koPar gumraah hamko rahanumaa hi karta chala gaya
@JJ:)the second one is good :)but the words need to be shuffled a bit to make it more pleasant to the ear :p
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